Makenzie-National Geographic:Flop Seen in Writing Center
Mary Francis-Sarah: How have your priorities changed from middle school to high school?
Tuesday, December 13, 2016
Monday, December 12, 2016
Writing Center Reflection
When I went to the writing center I felt like we worked well together editing. I told my writing fellow what I was concerned about and so we worked on those things. Mainly I was worried that I was analyzing the story more than the language or that I included too much plot. So that I didn't have as much of the story, we went through and slimmed down my context or introductions so that it was only what was necessary and not too wordy. We thought about what was necessary to understand the quotations and tried to make my introductions just that much so that I could focus on analyzation. I also asked her to look at my conclusion which I was worried about but she seemed to think it's okay. The writing fellow that I had was very nice but she wasn't as decisive as I'd hoped she'd be.
Though my writing fellow helped me a bit, it was only on the problem spots that I thought I had. I would have liked her to point out other things that she thought could have been improved. Either way it's okay though because I felt better about my paper after the meeting. Reading my paper aloud was very helpful because it made awkward parts very apparent. As I read aloud I marked parts that I knew sounded weird and then I went from there. The writing center was pretty helpful and not as bad as I expected. I would definitely go again even if we didn't have to.
Though my writing fellow helped me a bit, it was only on the problem spots that I thought I had. I would have liked her to point out other things that she thought could have been improved. Either way it's okay though because I felt better about my paper after the meeting. Reading my paper aloud was very helpful because it made awkward parts very apparent. As I read aloud I marked parts that I knew sounded weird and then I went from there. The writing center was pretty helpful and not as bad as I expected. I would definitely go again even if we didn't have to.
Sunday, December 11, 2016
Student Prompt
Sydney: Create your own character. Describe him/her in detail. What's his/her name? Age? What is his/her story?
Gunnar Albinsson was the eldest of his siblings. He was raised in the small Viking village of Grof for the past seventeen years. Though he enjoyed the coziness of his village on the water, he could never wait to get out. The men in his family were Berserkers and he had been ready to join them since the age of eight, but his parents insisted he train longer. So he worked hard. Harder than all of the other boys of his year and he knew that he would surpass them on the battlefield someday.
Today was finally that day. Gunnar was on his first raid with his father, Albin, and the rest of the warrior men from Grof. They were on a mission from their chief and had been sailing for days. At last, they reached their destination and took their ships to a quaint part of the beach, near the forest and prepared themselves for the raid to come. This tribe was supposed to put up a real fight and Gunnar could feel the adrenaline pumping in his veins. Seventeen years had built up to this and he was finally a part of the elite fighting force that his family was known for.
In the early evening, Gunnar could feel tension building throughout the men and everyone began to prepare. As they were approaching the village, the men he knew as family transformed. With no armor, they should have been worried, but instead, they were furious. Rage engulfed these men and Gunnar felt the haze of battle swallow him like a mist. Suddenly his vision was red and he wanted nothing more than a fight. And he knew in a few short moments, he'd get one.
Gunnar Albinsson was the eldest of his siblings. He was raised in the small Viking village of Grof for the past seventeen years. Though he enjoyed the coziness of his village on the water, he could never wait to get out. The men in his family were Berserkers and he had been ready to join them since the age of eight, but his parents insisted he train longer. So he worked hard. Harder than all of the other boys of his year and he knew that he would surpass them on the battlefield someday.
Today was finally that day. Gunnar was on his first raid with his father, Albin, and the rest of the warrior men from Grof. They were on a mission from their chief and had been sailing for days. At last, they reached their destination and took their ships to a quaint part of the beach, near the forest and prepared themselves for the raid to come. This tribe was supposed to put up a real fight and Gunnar could feel the adrenaline pumping in his veins. Seventeen years had built up to this and he was finally a part of the elite fighting force that his family was known for.
In the early evening, Gunnar could feel tension building throughout the men and everyone began to prepare. As they were approaching the village, the men he knew as family transformed. With no armor, they should have been worried, but instead, they were furious. Rage engulfed these men and Gunnar felt the haze of battle swallow him like a mist. Suddenly his vision was red and he wanted nothing more than a fight. And he knew in a few short moments, he'd get one.
Tuesday, December 6, 2016
Sunday, December 4, 2016
Free Post- Christmas Eve
Christmas Eve is not only the day before Christmas, which is exciting, but it's also my birthday. I love having a birthday around Christmas because it's my favorite time of year with the great weather, decorations, and all the festivities. I can also use winter activities like ice skating or Fulton Street in New Orleans as birthday party options but now that we're older and we usually just have smaller get-togethers or dinners for our birthdays, scheduling that can be difficult. People are never in town during Christmas break and even fewer are available to do things with me on my real birthday. Luckily for the past few years, my parents and I have had the same plan on my birthday and I'm perfectly content with it.
One of my closest friends has spent the night with me on the night before my birthday for the past few years and so when we get up on my birthday day, we eat breakfast and I open my present. My parents and I go to Ruth's Chris every year for my birthday for lunch but I think we've changed the restaurant this year. This year we're going to Gino's and then coming home to be festive and get pumped for Christmas. We might also have some family people over but that's not usually the plan and I'm not particularly one for change but I suppose it'll be fun. Finally, I love tradition so I love that each holiday is pretty predictable and I know that it'll be great and this birthday will hopefully be just the same.
One of my closest friends has spent the night with me on the night before my birthday for the past few years and so when we get up on my birthday day, we eat breakfast and I open my present. My parents and I go to Ruth's Chris every year for my birthday for lunch but I think we've changed the restaurant this year. This year we're going to Gino's and then coming home to be festive and get pumped for Christmas. We might also have some family people over but that's not usually the plan and I'm not particularly one for change but I suppose it'll be fun. Finally, I love tradition so I love that each holiday is pretty predictable and I know that it'll be great and this birthday will hopefully be just the same.
Literary Analysis Process
In my literary analysis, I've struggled a bit with a few things. I could not figure out what I wanted to write my thesis on and changed it about three times. I wasn't totally sure what ideas I had were literary based and what were more plot based, so that was an issue. Starting my draft was difficult even though I have a thorough outline because I just wasn't sure what to do for an introduction. Instead of getting stuck, I did about half of my introduction and then moved to my body paragraph because those are more factual and easier to get through.
It seems like once I start going, writing is easier to get through. After I started my body paragraphs they came along easily though I'm still working on them. My first body paragraph had a little hiccup because I just am not sure how much I like it. I don't know if I like my evidence for that point enough so I kind of left that paragraph and may go back and finish it or change it. Most everytime I've come to a block I've gotten people who sit with me in class to help me revise or change what I was thinking. This would be so much more difficult without the help of others.
It seems like once I start going, writing is easier to get through. After I started my body paragraphs they came along easily though I'm still working on them. My first body paragraph had a little hiccup because I just am not sure how much I like it. I don't know if I like my evidence for that point enough so I kind of left that paragraph and may go back and finish it or change it. Most everytime I've come to a block I've gotten people who sit with me in class to help me revise or change what I was thinking. This would be so much more difficult without the help of others.
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